Thursday, April 1, 2010

Here is right I have so far on my creative writing piece for you guys

Leave comments on what you think so far.

It was summer and young couple thought it would be nice to go out into the English country side. The couple wanted to get away from the city and heard about a house in the country that was being rented out for the summer. So the two decided to pack some of their things and rent it out. After a couple of days preparing the two headed out to the house.

After a couple hours of driving the two were able to the house in the distance

“Hey Sebby this looks like the house” saying the girl to the man in the driver’s seat.

The man the girl called “Sebby” looked to where she was pointing.

“Yup, that looks like the one” said Sebastian, who is the one apparently nicknamed Sebby. “As soon as I park the car we should unpack our stuff. We should get everything in before dark hits us.” Replying to the girl next to him.

Sebastian turns his head to face her “Claudia are you even listening to me?”

“Hm…? Oh yeah I heard you Sebastian I was just admiring how beautiful it was out here” said Claudia who was looking out of car door window. “And don’t talk to me like I’m some little girl I’m your girlfriend not your younger sister”

“I will talk to you like my younger sister if it gets you to listen to me” replied Sebastian “Besides you do act like her sometimes”

Claudia turned to him and smiled “Shut up you” she said giving him a playful punch to the shoulder.

The couple, Sebastian and Claudia got to the house and parked in the driveway in front.

“What a beautiful looking house” said Claudia as she got out of the car.

“Yeah it is quiet beautiful huh” said Sebastian as he got out of the car. “Now let’s get out things inside before it gets dark.”

“Alright fine, just get the door open first Sebby.”

Sebastian did so and they started to unload the car.

After a little bit of going in and out of the house the two of them got everything that they had brought with them inside. It was nearly dark before the finished unloading.

“God that took WAY longer than it needed to” said Sebastian “You just had to be picky where everything went didn’t you.”

“Well excuse me for trying to keep this place a bit organized when we first get here” said Claudia.

“Right than Claudia.”

“Do I detect sarcasm from you Sebby?”

“Oh no you don’t Princess make Sebastian do everything perfectly the first time.”

1 comment:

  1. I like the playful banter you've created between your characters. I sense that they are in a good relationship since they can tease each other. However, I have a feeling that this "beautiful house" may have a dark secret.

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